[A spacious one bedroom apartment furnished in the style of 1960s. Women’s clothing is scattered about. Jocelyn, a twenty-nine year old brunette, is sitting by the bed and smoking. Her make-up is ruined. Chason, a thirty-one year old police officer comes back home. The couple is in a love-hate relationship with repeated fights, breaking things and numerous make-ups. Jocelyn wants to marry Chason, but he always makes up phony excuses to get off the subject.]
Jocelyn [raising her voice]: So where have you been? I couldn’t get to sleep all night.
Chason [calmly]: I was conducting an interrogation, and it lasted longer than I expected, babe [approaches Jocelyn].
Jocelyn: What are you talking about? Melissa saw you at “Monkey Business” around 11 pm sipping beer with a whole bunch of girls.
Chason [confidently]: Listen, why would I run the risk of losing such a girl like you?
Jocelyn [nervous]: And you think it would last forever?! You are always lying to me. Why wouldn’t we get married?
Chason [sighs]: You are the only one for me darling. I thought we are a perfect couple.
Jocelyn: It hurts me so bad when you never come home. Chason, I am pregnant.
Chason [looks at her]: You know what; sometimes I hate your fucking guts. Aren’t you happy with me now?
Jocelyn: Leave me the fuck alone [turns away from Chason]. I see that you don’t care about me. I’m pushing thirty and I cannot get pregnant. What do I do? I am leaving you, Chason. And if you died I wouldn’t cry.
Chason [touches her face]: I’m sorry babe.
Jocelyn [looks in his eyes]: Please, don’t be.
Chason: I’ll always love you [violently rips off her lingerie].
Jocelyn: Sometimes I just feel so confused when you never show up.
Chason [grabs Jocelyn, throws her in bed]: Why don’t you just shut up? [holds Jocelyn firmly, kisses her roughly and passionately]
I can not understand who she is, and what is her problem – drugs, alcohol, unsatisfied sex life, impossibility to have children… There must be something to keep me with her… To support her… to be compassionate…
ReplyDeleteAnd then the man will be not a brutal beast and illogical one. And we will see that the story is LOVE but peculiar one, different, difficult, paradisiacal… and true.
is she really pregnant? if she is, then why is he so violent with her? if she is not, why would she say so?
ReplyDeletefor me, the dialog and the action seem to be disconnected in a way. if you want to show that jocelyn is turned on by the thought that chason is messing around with other women, you have to show it in the dialog, she has to at least give us a hint to it.
is chason really having sex with other girls or are they just role playing (maybe)?
You need to background her a bit better – you can do it by putting in more info in the dialogue. Also, you need to clarify the conflict – why are they really fighting? Why does the fight turn into a sex game? Is this a real conflict or it’s just a farce, because she doesn’t want to fight him, but they actually slip in a well known routine?
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